The Stench of Death; A blackout poem. Day 2.
My daughter and I spent some creative time together today, writing black out poetry.
We then read it out loud to each other. We really enjoyed the challenge, and came up with unique, thought-provoking unusual poetry.
If you wish to know more about Blackout poetry, please check out the link.
Here's one of my poems I created today:
The Stench Of Death
It was a mundane Monday evening
My brother wasn't answering his phone
Strange I thought
His bedroom light was on but his door was locked
My friend broke open the door
We found him there
Slumped over in his chair
His body cold
My handsome brilliant brother
Whom everybody loved
had decided that the world would be better off
without him
I clumsily tried
to do something
The ambulance arrived
The hospital was filthy
Garbage strewn around, giant bandicoots and cockraches
scurrying about
This must be a mistake I thought
They dragged the body out of the van
and tossed him on the floor
of the filthy hospital corridor
I pleaded with them
I pleaded with them again
When I returned
there was a pool of water, blood and bodily fluids
The stench was unbearable
The stench of death
**************© 2019 Preeti Shenoy kindly do not reproduce without permission
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Have you ever tried your hand at black out poetry? Or had you read any or heard of it?
Tell me in comments below :)
Tell me in comments below :)
Also tell me what you thought of my poem.
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Hi Mam! This is the first time I'm hearing about black out poetry. I don't have any idea about it but what you have written is brilliant. Very deep and emotional.
ReplyDeleteThank you Usha. Do try your hand at it some time.
DeleteDefinitely Mam. Thank you so much.
DeleteBlackout poem - Brilliant concept. Well written and Intense poem👌
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteNice concept
ReplyDeleteThanks Umesh
Delete**Goes to Google and Types What is Black Out Poetry?
ReplyDeleteI have linked it.
DeleteLearning Now :)
DeleteNever heard of this mam. Liked the poetry though... And i am very happy to see that you started this marathon in this month. I am so excited to read your posts everyday.. Something to look forward too each morning.. Thank you so much.
ReplyDeleteI had never heard about it. I will read up and try it with the kids. Thank you, always something to learn from your posts.
ReplyDeleteMam, learnt this term first time but and experiences of same pierced me when my father left us.A peice of poem composed yesterday after reading your poem is given below for your and reader's comments.
ReplyDeleteFather’s heavenly abode.
It was last May evening,
My brother called me.
That Father became serious,
Even difficult to believe.
Some medication went wrong,
Made his vision disappeared.
I wonder what it had?
Last fortnight he was OK.
When niece’s marriage solemnized.
Brother told that
Heammacseal got reacted
Given to improve health.
This laid vision loss
Within just two day.
When mother asked him
Call Kamlesh to meet.
He denied this time
Could not see him
Why you called him?
I suggest brother
Let him admit in BHU
I will reach next day.
Sudden phone rang at 4.0AM
I was stuck in some awkward
Weeping sounds tell me,
That caller delayed to tell
O! Ram,Oh!Ram why you left me alone
Deep weeping mother's word rejuvenate.
I felt careless, loveless,
Umbrella has broken
Exposed to heavy rain.
He left me alone
To weep out, weep out.
I was at job site,
Reached directly to Kashi
Took his body on shoulder
Up to Ganga river.
Pyre was set at Manikarnika
Kinship and village people came,
To bid last see off!
I Could not controlled
I weeped out, weeped out.
Lastly ashes disposed to Ganaga
We all returned our homes.
Mother started weeping loudly
I took her side & weeped out.
Father left to heavenly abode
Leaved all belonging here.
His persoana still alive
In the values and culture inherited.
Wow. This is the first time I have heard about Black Out Poetry. Must try it sometime. When I read this, I could feel all the emotions of the character tug at my heart strings and it made me realize the pain she was going through. Very interesting post, Preeti!
ReplyDeleteInteresting, not heard of the concept..Will Check it out..
ReplyDeleteGreat poetry
Hi Preeti,
ReplyDeleteThis is a Novel Concept, thanks to you for introducing! I think this takes a lot of creativity and curiosity to find hidden gems from something as ordinary as a newspaper and string them together to a beautiful poem. Hats off to you and your daughter for coming up with such a poignant piece of poetry. I am inspired to try this ~ Indu.