Desire
The prompt at Writers Island is Desire.
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Desire
I desire
A word from you.
Will you oblige?
To hear your voice again.
Will you speak?
To feel your hand in mine.
Will you hold it?
A response.
Will you answer?
I desire
A bit of your time.
Will you grant it?
I desire
To live once more.
Will you free me?
Wonderful.. The last line was very touching and needs a lot of conviction to say something like that! :-)
ReplyDeleteSo simple but speaks volumes.
ReplyDeleteThese lines I loved **I desire
A bit of your time.
Will you grant it? **
Sango: You really understood the essence of the poem.Thanks!
ReplyDeletePrats:Thanks!!
simple, but powerful. really nice :)
ReplyDeleteI desire you live for a hundred years, keep putting up such beautiful posts and make people smile generation after generation.
ReplyDeleteSimply awesome!! And like Sango already said, its the last line which hits one hard!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful.
ReplyDeletesimply beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteYou should not take the very direct meaning from a poem. Should read through lines. I think this simple poem gives lots of meaning. Really touching.
ReplyDeleteThe simplest of words can usually speak the loudest.
ReplyDeleteSimple lines, yet..
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!!
Simply beautiful - particularly the last line which I wasn't expecting.
ReplyDeletethis was a beautiful and eloquent poem.. I loved it
ReplyDeleteYour wish is my command :)
ReplyDeleteAh desire, tons to say about that...
Oh! So very lovely! And a bit tragic!
ReplyDeleteI agree with devil mood. So many volumes and volumes to be filled about desire. And how we each delight in examining our passions "strand by strand". Exquisite.
Lovely poem!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. I remember the song and the old clichet: "If you love some one, set them free"
ReplyDeleteoh how beautiful and i adored the last lines to live once more Will you free me
ReplyDeleteHonest and lovely! A plea that deserves an answer. Nice post!
ReplyDeleteMarja: Thanks my friend.I too felt the last two lines were poignant.
ReplyDeleteNiall: Sometimes it is the person who loves too much that has to set himself/herself free.
Chitra:Thanks!
Julie:Thanks so much--Yes it is a bit tragic.
DM: what wish?What command?;-)
Preethi:Thanks!!
Keith:yes--the last line I guess is the most powerful one.
HM: Thanks!!
ReplyDeleteAnthonynorth:Thanks!!
Nessa:Thanks!!
Karthik:True--you understood it well--maybe because you write poetry yourself.Thanks!
Pinkdogwood: :-)Thanks!!
NM:Yes--the last line was 'punch'.
Hari: :-) I dont want to live that long!
xh:Thanks!
reminds me of the song 'desire' by one of the greatest bands ever (in my opinion), click here - http://www.lyricsfreak.com/u/u2/desire_20141416.html
ReplyDeletethe best songs or poems are the ones where the end jumps at you with a twist, unexpected! yours does that :)
Guru: thanks--I like U2 too.
ReplyDeleteWill you free me?
ReplyDeleteSo simply put, but so deeply meant.
I forgot to mention how Venus in Sagittarius this poem is with that ending :)
ReplyDelete(I'm working on that post)
Sorry if this is a repeated comment, blogger is mocking me.
hey... Thru ur blog, I have always thot tat Preeti was happy n contend. Now I see something different!! Simple, yet soulful.
ReplyDeletereally awesome.
ReplyDeleteI think i can write a story based on this poem. :)
Punam:Yes--it is deep.
ReplyDeleteDM: waiting to read that!Nopes--it isnt a repeated comment.
Pointblank: :-) There are many sides to me.I'm not ALWAYS happy and content!Ask my husband and kids :-)
Preethi:Thanks! Nice meeting you!!
Oh desire, such a powerful word.
ReplyDeleteI love what you do with the Writer's prompts, you always treat them so royally.
xo
Gillian
Gillian:What a fabulous comoliment!Thank you!!
ReplyDeletesimple and beautiful, the way they should be...
ReplyDeletelovely piece..
lovely poem!
ReplyDeleteI've been a lurker so far.. this poem changed my status!
Wow this one is awesome!! Will be back for more. Can I blog roll you?
ReplyDeleteawesome poem....few words..deep meaning , simple yet hitting..loved it..
ReplyDeleteWow.. thats Amazing...
ReplyDeleteIt ends like an O'Henry tale.. with a twist. Loved it :)