Tuesday, February 27, 2007

Achille's heel

He looked hard

Trying to find

An Achille's heel

Bits of behind



He failed to see

I'd bared my soul

He could poke into my heart

And feel

The whole

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© Ps





Written by me on 15th February 2007






















16 comments:

  1. Dang woman, that was pretty fantabulous!!

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  2. That is beautifully moving.
    Thank you.

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  3. Ah, the achiles heel we had talked about.
    Good, as simple as it can be, congratulations :)

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  4. Katherine: Thank you my friend

    Freeleance Cynic:Thank you.Realised that i'd forgotten to key in one line (I usually write in pencil and key it in later)Have added it now.

    Devil Mood:Ah, the Achille's heel :-) Thank you

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  5. Hi PS
    you are a great poet too :):)

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  6. So you are as great a poet as you are an artist! :-) Lovely.

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  7. Deepak,Bob-Kat:Thanks for the lovely words of encouragement.

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  8. You say so much more between the lines!I like it very much. The photo on first glance reminded me of a candid photo of a hollowood type film photo magazine.."here's Audrey Hepburn in the Rue Monmartre on a rare break in filming"..but on second glance..is it you talking to a dog?

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  9. Niall:I'm so flattered,being compared to Audrey Hepburn.Yes, it is me.That was a stray dog, which had a burr stuck to its coat, which I was removing.Atul clicked a picture.I liked it a lot.I cropped it in Picassa.
    You do know how to read between the lines.Really well.
    Unfortunately most people who read the poem did not understand it.(They sent me messages asking to explain)

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  10. somehow i thought the last line wud be hole...

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  11. Diya:That was the beauty of the poem.He could feel 'the whole' not just the 'hole'

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  12. Your heel IS your whole. A very lovely poem.

    But I think the earrings could have been JUST a tad bit larger. And by the way, what shampoo and conditioner do you use? I think I saw that sweater in the 2000 catalogues.

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  13. So wanted to some of you past entries yesterday, happy I read it today...lovely:)

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  14. superb poem n a gr8 pic...

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